小学二年级英语作文:My holiday

正确句子比例很高，但需多多加强从句的使用；文中词汇表达较为丰富，但高级词汇比较少，单词拼写要也加强；全文结构不够严谨，文中很少使用衔接词和过渡词。

I'm going to the sun on my holiday. I will go there by a spaceship. I will take a big blue spaceship。 Then I'll pilot the sacesphip to the sun. the sun is very hot. So I put on the super-shirt. In the morning, I will have some sun burger for my breakfast.　　 At eight o'clock, I will play with my friends there. they are super dog and super girl. Super dog is white and black. Super girl is very clever. Super girl and super dog like to play with me. So I play with them for forty minutes. then I do my homework in my little red room on a small blue table. After my home work, I will have my lunch. I will eat sun alasd. I will make some red toy bear to the sun babies. I will have red juice, red fish and red rice. All the things are red. then I need a lot of water on the sun because the sun is too hot. So I will walk to the spaceship. I'll pilot the spaceship to the earth.