文中词汇使用较丰富,但高级词汇使用太少;加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;建议增加衔接词和过渡词的使用。
I've got a best friend,his name is Zhang Kefan.He always becomes NO.1 in test of maths.He's my apprentice,i'm very proud of him.He's a cute boy.I know,he likes me,but learn subjucts is NO.1. So,i can't like him.I like Wang Junkai,he's TFBOYS'S captain.He like singing songs,and playing the guitar.He's very cool,but a bit shy sometimes.I want to become his wife,in the future.