增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;文章词汇使用比较恰当,高级词汇积累不足;行文流畅,但衔接词比较少。
My friend name is sherry. she is my best friend. We recognition on college and live the same dormitory. She is twenty-one years old. Her hometown is in hebei. She has two pure eyes. She is an independant girl. No matter what happened, she always fulfill the tasks. She goes to American to trip four month by herself. She family have four personshe and she sister, father and mother, she father is a worker and mother is a homework, her sister is a high school student.