从句数量不足,可适当增加从句和复杂句的使用;文章层次较为清晰;文章能较灵活使用词汇,高级词汇有些少,还需注意个别拼写错误。
Is a busy day for me. The sun rise and the day is beggin,it`s at 9`clock now. My mother call me to help her do some homework when i am sleeping,i am too tired because last night i am insomnia, but i listened to and have to obediently for my mother word. I am clear my home and cooked food. Then to do my task,the teacher are arrange many homework,i dont like it. Afternoon, i play ping-pong with my classmate. And then i go to take a nap until my mom calling me to eat dinner, i wake up. At 9`colck i watch TV with my family,it is a hormony home. How enriching the day are.