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Is a busy day for me. The sun arises and the day beginning, at 9 am now. My mother call me to help her do some homework when I am sleeping, I am too tired because last night I am insomnia, but I listened to and have to obediently for my mother words. I am cleared my house and cooks some food. Then to do my task,the teacher are arrange much homework,i don`t like it. In the afternoon, I play ping-pong with my classmate, then I go to take a nap until my mom calling me to eating dinner, I wake up. At 9 pm I watch TV with my family,it is a hormony home. How enriching the day are.