应增加文中从句的使用;作者词汇量有些小,要注意检查拼写错误;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
I had a dream in yesterday,I dreamed Alice who is a beautiful girl.she took me to a Wonderland where have many kinds of flowers and they can speak.Many animals fly in the sky,but I can't flew.Alice gave me a special coat than I can flew and I was exicted,suddly I drop and call help me ,than I wake up and just a dream.