建议加强过渡词和衔接词的积累,文章结构不严谨;句式偏短,建议加强复杂句的使用;文中拼写错误稍多,词汇表达贫乏。
wy friend is very good. her name is lily. she has two big eyes. she has asmall mouth. she has a samall berother and asisiter. our very like them .she father is a teacher and her mother is a acter. her brother is a baby. he can't talk and can't wallk.