2015年高考作文优秀范文：登山活动

作者应增加从句的使用；文中词汇表达较灵活丰富，不过请检查文章的单词拼写；过渡词和衔接词使用不恰当，缺少组织，可适当增加连接词的使用。

Nowdays ,a hike activities holded by Xing Guang High School on the 10th of April at DaqingMountain.it is not only a healthy activity for students ,but also a better way to reduse their pressure.in the activity,students attain a lot of happiness,friendship. the acrivities get great success,what we moved is the spirits the students struggle for the top.with the time goes on,the students continue to go for the winner, showing their spirits .