句式多变,多多练习从句的使用;建议增加衔接词和过渡词的使用;文中的拼写错误有点多。
My favorite sports My favorite sports is play footboll,even through i am not very good at it. before footboll,my favorite sports was play basketball. but by change i fall in love play footboll.sometimes,i get a footboll on my way to home,then i play with my friends,and fall in love play footboll deeply.after this,i ususlly pritreas with my classmates,and sometimes,we make a team and play game with others.bakehanmu is my favorite footboll player,become a professional football player is my bigest dream