句式变化多样,句法方面做的很棒;采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅;文中高级词汇不足。
My hometown As the old saying goes, Everyone's home is their peaceful haven of heart. And hometown is for the most important part in heart. My hometown is in the countryside, where has birds, fish and flowers everywhere. It's my paradise, I really love there, when I was child, my mother usually tells me that as man should more higher than mountain and more stronger than tiger, these words were are and will in my heart, my journey of growing is full of ups and downs. I wasn't a good boy in my childhood, I like flighting with other boys. My mother must flighted to me when I flighted with other boys. which memories are very important in my childhood and hometown. When I was twenty years ago, I don't go to hometown everymouth, but my hometown gives me something, I will remember it.