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There are lots of parents take all things for their children, when their children are a student, parents instead of their children to decide which schools、friends、specialty to choose, when their children finsh school, parents instead of their children to decide works and others. All of this factor caused children rely on their parents. But child would not always rely on parents, so parents should allow and help their children to be independent. At begins, parents can let their children to arranged some small affairs by Themselves, and give them courage to do something alone. what's more, parents should not arrange everything for their children. The best way to help children to be independent is let them live alone, do not help them again, only in this way can help them to be truly independent as soon an possible. For their child independence, parents let them go,fly in the free sky.