文中词汇表达较丰富恰当,但学术词汇稍显不足;作者有一定功底,可在平时练习中增加长难句的记忆;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
It is almost beyond doubt that as a student, no matter how old you are, all you should do and can do is to study. However, a few second-and third-year students in a provincial university decided to try their hands at business to get prepared in their future. They opened six small shops near their university. And I am totally for their decisions. For a long time, we seem to have been confused about the original intention for our study. I think the meaning lies not only in mastering knowledge about the mystery universe, but also in put them into practice to guarantee a better life. College students are the symble of our nation's spirit and hope, to some degree, constructing the blue print for our country. To shoulder the incumbent, college students are supposed to experience all kinds of life. And going for business is of great importance for them to combine their knowledge with life, which can in turn intensify their memories. College students are never tools to store knowledge, but to build promising future with what they are advantage about.