2011年6月英语四级作文真题:网上购物

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My views on Online Shopping With the trend of fashion,many people like to go shopping on the line.They think this way more than convenient. With more and more people shopping on the line,most of the people accept with which way.Online shopping has many advantages,such as it is very convenient than others,and goods are qualify.It is can save much time for people.And shopping on the line cheaper than go to shop.But,on the other hand,it has some disadvantages,such as it is not safety,and increase time of people on the line. So,in my opinion,people should go to shop buy what you want.It not only takes exercise but also can promote people's communication。