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过渡词很丰富,衔接词同时使用的恰到好处;作者句法基本功不错,可适当增加从句的使用;文中词汇表达灵活多样请继续保持,学术词汇积累也做的很棒。
In accordance with what is detailedly revealed in the bar chart above,we can observe distinctly that the remarkable growth has taken place in the average number of hours that a student spends on the computer per week.In the year of 1990,the average number of the hour was merely two hours that a student spent on the computer per week nevertheless,it is within no more than several years that it went up to approximately four hours in 1995,and after another five years soared to roughly 20 hours. It is no difficult for us to come up with some factors responsible for this phnomenon.In the first place,computers do facilitate folks in such aspects as word processing,book keeping and multimedia presentations.In the light of a recent Internet survey,nearly 80