Source: Bureau of Labor Statistics, Current Population Survey.
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nowadays,some people think that there is no use to receive education ,and it is a better choice to enter the work world earlier.in my point of view ,that is totally wrong.better education may not absolutely means better life ,higher salaries,but by and large ,it is ordinary occasions according to Bureau of Labor Statistics, Current Population Survey.