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nowadays, the human focus on the emery crisis, that oil and coal are limited resources .When people used energy it become more and more less. The increase economy is dependent on nature resources ,so become emery the energy crisis. Save the energy is very good meaning .Firstly ,at present majority environment pollute is due to the wrong ways used nature resources result in emery crisis .In china are meeting with more and more problems of pollute ,for example water pollute ,air pollute and so on. The best of used of emery is save the emery and reduce environment pollute. Secondly, reduce the use nature resources it is continuity economy increasing. As the students of colleges and universities, we are should save energy, in order built harmonious social and live in green environment, shall we together for save energy devote ourselves power.