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作者句法不错，但是文章整体句子稍微偏短；作者能较熟练、灵活地使用词汇，建议要多使用学术词汇；结构不严谨，几乎没有使用衔接词，上下文衔接欠流畅。
Dear Editor, I am writing to ask for your suggestions because I have got many problems recently. Here is the letter. My name is Li Hong. I have been an excellent basketball player.I love playing it so much during my leisure time.There has a good news that my coach is trying to push me up as a basketball star. With that opputunity , I don't want to miss it. But it usually takes much time and so that I don't have enough time for studying.So my parents want me to study hard on my studies rather than spending a lot of time playing basketball. Since training or competitions have an important role in my life . I don't want to forsake it but my parents do want me to stay away from those stuff. And now I am confusing , so can you please tell me how to deal with those problems? sincerely, Li Hong
