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nowadays, the human focus on the emery crisis, which oil and coal is limited resources .When people used energy it become much and much less. The economic growth is dependent on nature resources ,so become emery the energy crisis. Saveing the energy has the very good meaning .Firstly ,at present majority environment pollute is due to the wrong ways used nature resources result in emery crisis .In china are meeting with more and more problems of pollute ,for example water pollute ,air pollute and so on. The best of used of emery is saving the rescoues and reduce the pollution of environment. Secondly, reduce the use nature resources it is economic sustainable developing. As the students of colleges and universities, we should save energy, in order built harmonious social and live in green environment, shall we together for save energy devote ourselves power.