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The Dragon Boat Festival is highly appreciated among most Chinese people. This festival is set up to commemorate the great poet Qu Yuan, according to the Chinese legend. To celebrate this traditional festival, people make glutinous rice dumplings and take the dragon boat racing. Of course, during the occasion, a great number of audiences will be rooting for the rowers along the bank, which will definitely cheer the rowers up. We can imagin how fierce the competition will be. The game the rowers bring to the audiences will definitely be very exciting. The rowers will show their masculinity while they are rowing, perhaps the girls watching the competition will be more exiting than them by then.
