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In recent years,more and more people are willing to use the Internet to communicate with each other ,people become lazier and lazier to stay at home than go out the side . In this circumstances ,we will lose our true minds and words ,we will become not truth . So if we want to change this situations, we must not be addicted to the Internet,we should do other things to alternate our cautions .We can take measures ,such as do some exercises with our friends and go hiking and so on. In my opinion ,the Internet have two sides ,one is good ,the other is bad .The good is that it's very convinen
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