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My favorite sport is playing football. I loved playing football by chance that i got a ball when i was going home.then,i was playing foootball with my friends .From that, i am love playing football deeply. I often have tainning and match with my classmates.what is more .my favorite star is a English man called backlham. Being a professional football player is my biggest wish.