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As we all know, internet is developing so fast with time go by. Online shopping is became vary popular between peoples. Every thing has two sides,Online shopping has much benefit.but it aslo has some problems. Online shopping can buy everthing across internet without going out home.while,the things bought by Online shopping are more cheaper than stone.what is more, there are alot of products can be chosen by consumer and you can not wash your time.Some products bought by Online shopping that have quality problems. Sometimes you need more time to wait your products. in my idea , the Online shopping is more benefit tjan disbenefit. Online shopping is became more and more importiant in our life. I like Online shopping ,it is so cool.
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