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Ladies and Gentlemen, Would you like to join a club to make your college life more colorful? Come to Sports Club. In our club, you can do any exercise you want. We have badminton, volleyball, ping-pong and so on for your choice. We have lots of activity at the weekend. If you join our club, I promising that you never regret this decision. Sport club is a club full of energy. You can make many new friends in there, and share you sport skill and experience. You also can learn some sport that you don not knows. Otherwise, according to attend kind of activity, you can improve your communication skill. Join us! Write your basic information on paper with photo. We will contact you as soon as possible. We look forward to your coming