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In accordance with what is detailedly demonstrated in the diagram above,we can observe distinctly that significant changes have taken place in the past decade in terms of citizens'diet.The consumption of grain,the staple food of our daily life,has been on a rapid decline all the time.Based on the data which is provided,folks can recognize that the consumption of grain was approximately 49% in 2000 nevertheless,it dropped to 40% in 2010.By contrast,some high-energy food,such as milk and meat,has been on a steady increase. It is of no difficulty for us to come up with some factors responsible for these changes.At the top of the list,it is with the rapid development of the economy that the ordinary inhabitants can make better profit.Consequently,they can purchase the luxuries such as milk and meat which cannot be afforded freely in that the high price in the past decade years.In addition,more and more civilians come to recognize the importance of a balanced diet in which milk and meat is indispensable.Finally,the booming manufacture industry has made the adequate supply of various food products possible,which promotes the popularity of milk and meat. Taking into consideration what has been discussed so far,we are very glad to see that this phenomenon indicates the better-off living standards of the rank and file.But on the other hand,eating too much high-energy food will lead to some diseases.Therefore,we should attach much importance to the balance of diet in our daily life.