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Nowadays,Online Shopping has been a popular way,which takes a lot of benefits. With it,we can purchase what we want when drinking.Moreover,we can get the things we like where we don't need to go buy.However,anyhow,everything has two sides.Even thought it has the convenient Online shopping,it still has some aspects.For example,we cann't know if it is good.Another,the goods may be broken where it has been sent for us. In my opinion,I think we shoud be wariness when we shopping online.