作者能较熟练地使用词汇表达,一些学术词汇的使用也比较灵活;句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;文章层次不够分明,缺少组织,需注意文章整体的组织结构。
You can give your help in many ways. Here I have three suggestions. First, you can donate your allowance. The money will be transfer into the hands of those children. They can use the money to buy stuffs such as books, pens and so on. Donating money is a way of helping which is easy to operate and provides unlimited using to the children. Second, you can donate stuffs that you don't need anymore and is useful to the children. Books, pens, bags, and even balls are welcomed. They will be transported together in trucks to those areas and distributed to the children. Third, you can appeal to your parents for donating either money or stuffs. This can ensure the quantity and quality of the donations as adults have many more choices than us in money and stuffs. Lastly, I think the children will be grateful for your helps, and the society will appreciate your contributions, and you will feel happy about yourselves. Thank you!
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