拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;如果增加些复杂句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;有效地使用了语句间的衔接成分。
Nowadays,Online Shopping has been a popular way,which takes a lot of benefits. With it,we can purchase what we want when drinking.Moreover,we can get the things we like where we don't need to go buy.However,anyhow,everything has two sides.Even thought it has the convenient Online shopping,it still has some aspects.For example,we cannot know whether it is good.Another,the goods may be broken where it has been sent for us. In my opinion,I think we should be smart when we shopping online.