托福独立写作模拟题:关于金钱

拼写很棒，可适当增加学术词汇的使用；句法知识很棒，若增加一些从句的使用，文章会更出色；层次不清晰，几乎没有使用衔接词。

With the development of the world,money will be more and more important in our life. Many people believe that it is very important to make large amounts of money, while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. For the first view, a lot of money will satisfied our needs. We will have enough money to study and travel to open our eyes and learn other able. Besides, we can help other people with our able. But too much money will still make troubles. Some people may 妒忌us and try to let us down. And to achieve the goal for money we will lost ourselves and feel tired. The second point, we will much easy to live happy life for our satisfied attitude. And we will spend much more time playing with family and go out for a walk to relax ourselves. But too little money will limit our feet. In my opinion , I agree with the second. Money is not end. We should look at what in our hand and live happy.