雅思写作范文:城市交通问题

从句使用不足，建议增加长句和复杂句的使用；文中词汇表达使用较丰富，部分学术词汇的使用比较灵活，单词拼写方面要继续努力；衔接成分太少，文章结构欠佳。

With the developement of technology ,our lives is getting more and more convenient . The world became a small city thanks to the developed traffic tools.We can take a trip to the cities we like ,we can meet with friends in time by car. But at the same time ,cars raise traffic issues like traffic jamp,car accdients etc. I hate traffice jamp which waste a lot of time and it makes people tired . Then tirdness lead to accident.As reported, there are hundreds and thousands accidents caused by cars and people injuried or dead .It's very horrilbe. Besides, cars is one of the main sources of air and noise pollutions .Futher more, it consumme a plenty of oil /gases .More cars, severer weather .People start to pay attention to the negative effect of cars. Therefore ,the government are launching some policy to reduce the harm of it . We should use the personnal cars less ,more public traffic tool like bus ,do something about it .