题目:Computer and Man人与电脑
字数:150满分:100分
从句比例偏少,简单句稍微偏多了;上下文衔接稍显不流畅;希望学术词汇的使用能更熟练一些,还要加强单词拼写的检查。
in the mordern society,computers are playing an important role in humanbeings life.as we know,the morden electronic products are created by human of course includes computer.so computer and man have a close contaction. a lot of people become the computer users because of the rapidly development of morden imformation and technolege.firstly, peopele use computer searhing messages what they want on the net,secondly,they use it playing computer games,watching videos,listenning music and so on.even more ,they can make friends by the net. computer is man,s good friends in sometime dgree. but in another side,many people especially young students are sinking into the net,it is harmful to their growth.computer just a tool for people have a better life ,we should deal well with the connection of computer and human ,using the computer in benifiet spects.