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With the rapid development of the economy,the internet plays a more and more important role in our daily life,all of us can not deny it.As is known to all the internet is of great importance,from my perspetive,i think the internet do good to our international communication.People can communicate with each other through the internet instead of having a face-to-face communication.In other words,it is convenient for us to have a talk with our friends.Futhermore,if we are engaged with our things,we can leave a message by internet.It is so easy for us.Finally ,if we are quarrled with our friends,it is also a better way to deal with it.To sum up,the internet is beneficial to international communication.
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