如若增加一些长难句的使用,会为文章添彩;作者能词汇表达较准确熟练,但请仔细检查词汇的拼写;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Internet is convenient in the world today. When i chat with my classmates and friends,i always ask them,"What do you usually do on Internet and how often do you surf the Internet? How long?"I usually listen to music,chat,see some movies,search, and download something. Some people say,'you are not ncessary to travel the world if you have a computer' because you can research on line if you want know. LuYU,as a famous host,she doesn't know anything about computer.but she has a vital brain and beauty words.So,as for me,i don't think Internet is whole life. Internet,we have to say it can help us to imporve our work and study effecient.However,some people use Internet to get unuseful,unhealthy imformations.It's terriable. Personally,we should learn knowledge about internet,but we should not get unhealthy imformations on line.We should do meanful thing...