内容:本人在12月15日到22日在纽约举行的展览会期间了解到贵公司产品号为5670的新产品,非常感兴趣,请贵方发给我们一份价格单和说明书。感谢贵方的合作,希望我们可以建立贸易关系。
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1.price list and instruction价格单和说明书
2.establish business relationship建立贸易关系
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From:hubin@163.com To:KPOHsales@hotmail.com Dear Sir and Mandam: I know you products on the exibihtion which held in NewYork at 15th to 22th Dec.the produce nubmer is 5670,i was very intrest in it,please send me the price list an instruction.thank you attention, i hope estalish business relationship with you ,we looking farword your early reply. sincerely Hubin