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5.意义：保护环境
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October 28, 2012 Sunday Sunny
Today I am very excited because I did a lot of things with my teachers and classmates to protect our environment._________________________________________________________
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Today I am very excited because I did a lot of things with my teachers and classmates to protect our environment. We met at the school gate at eight o’clock in the morning. We went to Zhongshan Park on our bikes. We talked about the environment protection yo the people. We collected litter and picked up plastic bags. Our purpose was to protect the environment. At five in the afternoon, we came back home. I felt very tired but happy.
