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More and more people prefer to enjoy western festival than spend Chinese festival these days,such as the Venantine's Day,Christmas day and so on.This is a universal phenomonon that we will discuss toady. There are variety of reasons as below.In the first place,many of people are influenced by the international and curious minds.Thus,they are exposed to enjoy it.Second,western festival of which are much more romantic fulling special imagination.What's more, compared with the Chinese festival,the western festival attracted young people a lot.It is not only a most interesting,but stimulate young people to initiate all kinds of ways enjoying the fantastic festival as well.However,it also causes a serious situation that our traditional Chinese festival are forgotten by lot sof young people,for nobody is willling to learn those traditional skills.As a result,Chinese festival are becoming more and more tedious. In my estimated,some effective actions should be taken,otherwise,it wll a great losses for Chines people.To begin with,the government should take some steps to protect those special skills lossing.Moreore,disciplining people the importance of traditional skills.
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