2012年12月英语六级作文真题(II):人与电脑

学术词汇使用熟练，不过请注意单词拼写的检查；文中应增加一些长难句的使用，会为文章添彩；过渡词和衔接词使用不恰当，缺少组织，可适当增加连接词的使用。

With the development of the economic and technology ,people 's life has become more and more comfortable and convenient, which own to the computer's evolution. it is the true that computers do bring a lot of convent to our life. in our living we save a lot of time to use them .Now just stay at home ,we have bought some commodiations and take some fee.In the factory ,some equipments have controlled by computers ,as result ,people not only could have avoided dangerous and bad environment, but also improved efficient. even some people take some occuptions on line. now computer can provide more and more considerable servives and requirements. I hope that computer can develope it's protential value to meet our commends.