2012年12月英语六级作文真题(II):人与电脑

作者学术词汇积累做的很棒，但总体词汇丰富度要加强；文中应增加一些长难句的使用，会为文章添彩；文章层次不够分明，缺少组织，需注意文章整体的组织结构。

With the development of the economic and technology,people 's life has become more and more comfortable and convenient, which own to the computer's evolution. It is the true that computers do bring a lot of convent to our life. In our living we save a lot of time to use them. Now just stay at home, we have bought some commodiations and take some fee. In the factory, some equipment have controlled by computers, as a result, people not only could have avoided dangerous and bad environment, but also improved efficient. Even some people take some occupations on line. Now computer can provide more and more considerable servives and requirements. I hope that computer can develop its potential value to meet our commends.