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2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

发布时间:2013-05-17 11:41浏览次数:9787
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题目 On Excessive Packaging
要求
1.目前许多商品存在过度包装的现象
2.出现这一现象的原因
3.我对这一现象的看法和建议
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文章词汇使用丰富度还要提高,学术词汇的积累上也要再接再厉;简单句比重稍微偏高,注意极个别句子错误;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。

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Recently, there are many products in the market with beautiful packaging and some are more than one packaging.Actually,they are excessive packaging. There are various reasons why this phenomenon exists.First,they look luxurious ,maybe send to others as gifts,it is a very face-saving thing.Second,many consumers like to buy goods with nice appearance which can attract more consumer's eyes and it can increase sales.Last,companies think that with beautiful packaging it's good for getting more benefits,because there is additional value. In my opinion,it is unnecessary to excessive packaging.It's a waste of resource and not contribute to protecting the environment.I think the product itself is the most important thing and packaging is just ornamental.I hope the goverment can appeal residents to reduce buying excessive packaging products.

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