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"I don't know how to wash it!""My mother will tell me the way."Many children needn't do most things in their lift when they still live home ,because their parents have done all of them. Children have lost the ability of living by themselives, they maybe dead after leaving their parent.now we must do something due to help children to be independent. First, keep enough space to children when they do something by own; second, parents would courage them to choose their own style of life, to think how to improve their dependent adility; Last, parents must believe them, and praise them when they learn everything.