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Is It Wise to Make Friends Online With the development of the information teachnology, increasing number of people communicate with other people via QQ, MSN, and FACEBOOK.Some people think that making friends Online is wise for giving a new way to expend your circle of friends. However, other people hold the idea that it is indiscreet to make friends on the Internet. As for me, I agree with the former idea that it's wise to make friends online. Making friends Online is a new way to broaden our circle of friends. What's more, making friends in the internet isn't only enlarge your knowledge, but also broaden your horizon. Learning from those net friends living in different cities or countries,we acquire more surprisedly colorful clutures and knowledge.Most important, we could talk our sadness and misfortune to those unfamiliar friends rather than those friends in our real life, because we dislike becoming the centre of depressions in our daily life. To sum up, a natural conclusion can be drawn that making friends online is beneficial to people's communication and enlarge our knowledge.
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