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It is easy to be cheated by advertisement in the webside, in spite of those are super stars in HongKong. The article shows us that We shoud think clearly before we believe and try their products. In 21 century, there are plenty of new products which are special and chemical. Compare with the products in 19s, now it is more easily to appeal human beings to buy the new products . They seem to buy all those things without any other consideration. They just believe that the "effect" can be shown real to the reality. According to the passage, the star in HK should be guilty about the false advertisement . As a representative of the products, who show that the real effect to public residents and so that they are likely to believe and try it. As a smart custumer , we should think more before we really want to buy the products show in the ad. Because we should make sure the product whether is legal or not.