文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;文中句子错误比较多;行文流畅,但衔接词比较少;连词使用偏少;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开;请注意分段。
Dear Mary Chen, tomorrow i will have a business trip to beijing and stay there for a week, i am very sorry, I can not discuss the matter of new year's get-together with you,kindly please help to inform me the date , location and others of your final decision ,thanks in advance for your help. best regards, Ming Li