文章词汇表达要更加熟练,希望能更多使用一些学术词汇;文中句子错误比较多;行文流畅,但衔接词比较少;连词使用偏少;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开;请注意分段。
Dear Mary Chen, Tomorrow I will have a business trip to Beijing and stay there for a week,I am very sorry,I cannot discuss the matter of new year's get-together with you,kindly please help to inform me of the date,location and others of your final decision,thanks in advance for your help. Best regards, Ming Li