文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;作者句法知识不够扎实,从句也偏少;建议加强积累过渡词和衔接词的积累,文章结构不严谨;连词使用偏少;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开。
Dear Mary Chen, Tomorrow I will have a business trip to Beijing and stay there for a week. I am very sorry,I can't discuss the matter of new year's get-together with you,kindly please help to inform me of the date,location and others of your final decision,thanks in advance for your support. Best regards, Ming Li