2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

语句间的衔接成分用的不错，同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富；句子错误偏多，建议修改；作者平时练习中应扩充词汇量，注意几处拼写错误；请注意分段。

Devoloping with the society,people want survive so that become more and more dishonesty,to increasing income,at present,there is a phenomenon that many goods are excessived packaging by some bussinessman. In my opinion,this is a unfair trade for consumers,a lot of bad effection are caused because the phenomenon,I think everyone should be honest man,so we can strengthen inspectionsa and write something suggest bussiness don't do this,only in this way can we make our society become well.