语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;熟练的使用了从句和复杂句;能较灵活地使用部分学术词汇,有基础拼写错误,需要注意一下;请注意分段。
Devoloping with the society,people want survive so that become more and more dishonesty,to increasing income,at present,there is a phenomenon that many goods are excessively packaging by some businessman. In my opinion,this is wrong artical trade for consumers,a lot of bad effection are caused because the phenomenon,I think everyone should be honest man,so we can strengthen inspections and write something suggest businessman don't do this,only in this way can we make our society become well.