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Talent show This picture describes that some people' attitude onTalent show.They hold different views about it. Most people think its advantages over its disadvantages.There are several reasons for it.On the one hand it is essential to enrich people's extra activities for those who always stay at hoom.On the other hand,you will have a good chance to practice yourself.As the coin has two sides,some people have opponents.Attending the Talent show spend their too much time.They cannot do other things. In my view,Talent show can create an opportunity to those who wants to famous people.You should take good advantage of the chance.