Source: Bureau of Labor Statistics, Current Population Survey.
拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;简单句比重稍微偏高,注意个别句子错误;上下文衔接稍显不流畅。
People on their smartphone Now with the development of economy and science and technology,smartphone is becoming more and more popular among people. The phenomenon has some reasons.First of all,the living standard of people is raise.I think it is an important reason.Smartphone can provide all kinds of amusements such as playing games,listening to music,studying on the internet and so on.What`s more,we can search information which we want no matter when and where. However,as we all known,every coin has two sides.First,focusing our eyes on the smartphone too long is bad for our eyes.Besides,we often ignore what happen around us.What`s worse,it is dangerous that people use smartphone when they across the street. In a world,making full use of smartphone can help us living better.