Source: Bureau of Labor Statistics, Current Population Survey.
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people on their smartphone nowadays.with the development of technology .more and more people use the smartphones .as we all know. the smartphones have big diffirent from former phones .they have much function .not only can it connects with people .but it also provides much services .on the one hand .people could learn much through it .its like a minicomputer.on the other hand .for the strongfunction .people spend much time on it instead of communicating with others. so peopleare estranged from one another .whenver and wherever they contribute themselves to the smartphones . in my opinion.the aspects of positive are less than negative.so i hope people can put down their smartphones to care of others who around them.