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The story tells us that three brothers worked at the same company and got the same wages but some years their wages are different because thier way to work was different. Through the passage, i think that tthe difference of the wages of three btrothers is because their attitudes to the work are different.After reading,i learn a lot from the story.The attutide depends anything.If we dont have a positive attitude,we will never do the things well.As i am concered,the attitude is just like the quality of the clothing.Good or bad,depends the quality.We can take some examples to understand it better.As we all known,who is lazy,who will get the low mark in the exam,on the contray,the studious will get good mark.